Question

5．假如你是李華，你的美國筆友Bill來信詢問你的家鄉是否有霧霾天氣，情況如何．請按下面提示寫一封電子郵件，開頭已給出．
介紹情況：
1．最近發生數次霧霾天氣；
2．霧霾天氣的危害（至少兩條）；
3．正采取各種舉措減少其發生；
4．你自己為此做了什么或打算做什么．
注意：詞數1 00個左右．
參考詞匯：霧霾：smog
Dear Bill，
I'm glad to receive your letter．Thank you for your caring for the weather and my health．Now I'd like to tell you somethng about the smog．Recently，the smog has occurred a lot of times．It has done great harm to our daily life．Many traffic accidents have taken place just because of the heavy smog and more and more people have to go to see the doctor because of the serious disease caused by the smog．（高分句型一）Anyway，people's life is greatly affected．
Fortunately，people have further realized the great harm caused by the smog and the importance of protecting the environment．（高分句型二）People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the smog weather．
As for me，I'll go to school by bike or on foot，and I won't throw the waste anywhere．（高分句型三）In addition，I'll tell the people I meet to protect the environment．Would you like to tell me some good ideas？I'm looking forward to your reply．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據提示信息假如你是李華，你的美國筆友Bill來信詢問你的家鄉是否有霧霾天氣，情況如何．請按下面提示寫一封電子郵件，開頭已給出，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：最近發生數次霧霾天氣；霧霾天氣的危害（至少兩條）；正采取各種舉措減少其發生；你自己為此做了什么或打算做什么．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據要表達的內容確定句子的時態、語態．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：care for關心； Recently最近； take place 發生；because of 由于；Anyway無論如何；Fortunately幸運的是；As for至于，關于；In addition另外；look forward to盼望；
Many traffic accidents have taken place just because of the heavy smog and more and more people have to go to see the doctor because of the serious disease caused by the smog．（高分句型一）
Fortunately，people have further realized the great harm caused by the smog and the importance of protecting the environment．（高分句型二）
As for me，I'll go to school by bike or on foot，and I won't throw the waste anywhere．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Bill，
        I'm glad to receive your letter．Thank you for your caring for the weather and my health．Now I'd glad to tell you something about the smog．
        Recently，the smog has occurred a lot of times．It has done great harm to our daily life．Many traffic accidents have taken place just because of the heavy smog and more and more people have to go to see the doctor because of the serious disease caused by the smog．（高分句型一）Anyway，people's life is greatly affected．
        Fortunately，people have further realized the great harm caused by the smog and the importance of protecting the environment．（高分句型二）People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the smog weather．
        As for me，I'll go to school by bike or on foot，and I won't throw the waste anywhere．（高分句型三）In addition，I'll tell the people I meet to protect the environment．Would you like to tell me some good ideas？I'm looking forward to your reply．
                                                                           Yours sincerely
                                                                           Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．