Question

10．假定你叫李華，是一位兼職教師，你所任教的學校里有很多兒童嚴重超重．你就此給某報編輯寫信，給孩子的家長一些忠告．內容包括：
1，應該更加關注孩子的健康．
2，幫助孩子養成良好的飲食習慣．
3，鼓勵孩子們多運動，并參加一些有益的課外活動（out-of-class activities）
注意，信的開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數．詞數110左右．
Dear Editor，
I am a part-time teacher in a primary school．Recently I've been worried to find more and more children in school are overweightThis is very bad for their health．So I'm writing to give their parents some advice as follows．
All the parents are caring much about their children's life and studies，but I think they should pay more attention to their children's health．（高分句型一）So it is very important for them to offer their children balanced diets，because healthy eating can not only provide children with enough energy for them to grow up but also keep them healthy．（高分句型二）They should help their children to stay away from junk food．In addition，they ought to encourage their children to help them with some housework，take some exercise every day and take part in some out-of-class activities which can benefit the children．（高分句型三）
I look forward to seeing all the children growing up healthily．
Yours
LiHua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據提示信息假定你叫李華，是一位兼職教師，你所任教的學校里有很多兒童嚴重超重．你就此給某報編輯寫信，給孩子的家長一些忠告，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：應該更加關注孩子的健康．幫助孩子養成良好的飲食習慣．鼓勵孩子們多運動，并參加一些有益的課外活動（out-of-class activities）2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據要表達的內容確定句子的時態、語態．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：be bad for 對…有害；pay more attention to多關注；balanced diets平衡飲食；not only，but also不僅，而且；In addition另外；look forward to盼望；
   All the parents are caring much about their children's life and studies，but I think they should pay more attention to their children's health．（高分句型一）
So it is very important for them to offer their children balanced diets，because healthy eating can not only provide children with enough energy for them to grow up but also keep them healthy．（高分句型二）
In addition，they ought to encourage their children to help them with some housework，take some exercise every day and take part in some out-of-class activities which can benefit the children．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Editor，
       I am a part-time teacher in a primary school．Recently I've been worried to find more and more children in school are overweight．This is very bad for their health．So I'm writing to give their parents some advice as follows．
       All the parents are caring much about their children's life and studies，but I think they should pay more attention to their children's health．（高分句型一）So it is very important for them to offer their children balanced diets，because healthy eating can not only provide children with enough energy for them to grow up but also keep them healthy．（高分句型二）They should help their children to stay away from junk food．In addition，they ought to encourage their children to help them with some housework，take some exercise every day and take part in some out-of-class activities which can benefit the children．（高分句型三）
       I look forward to seeing all the children growing up healthily．
                                                                    Yours，
                                                                    Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．