Question

假如你叫王倩，5月26日那天，你和同學(xué)約好去春游。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)表格中所給信息，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇日記。

活動(dòng)時(shí)間	5月26日（星期日）
集合地點(diǎn)	學(xué)校大門(mén)口
出發(fā)時(shí)間	8:00am	到達(dá)時(shí)間	8:30am
活動(dòng)地點(diǎn)	人民公園(the People’s Park)
交通工具	自行車(chē)
活動(dòng)內(nèi)容	上午 做游戲
	中午  野餐
	下午 拍照片；參觀(guān)動(dòng)物園
返回時(shí)間	5:00pm

參考詞匯：出發(fā)set off
May 26^th, Sunday                                       Fine
It was fine.________________________________________________

Answer 1

May 26^th, Sunday                                                       Fine
It was fine. I had a spring outing with my classmates today. We met at the school gate in the morning. And we set off at 8 O’clock. We went there by bike and we arrived at the People’s Park at half past 8. There were lots of people. In the morning, I played games with my classmates. Then we had a picnic together. In the afternoon, we took some photos and visited the zoo. We saw many cute animals there. We returned home at 5 in the afternoon. We were very happy.

試題分析：這篇作為要求我們以王倩的身份寫(xiě)一篇日記，在日記中記錄5月26號(hào)這天，和同學(xué)們一起去人民公園春游的事情。在題目中給出了我們這篇作文應(yīng)主要包含的要點(diǎn)，如見(jiàn)面的時(shí)間和地點(diǎn)，出發(fā)和到達(dá)的時(shí)間，在公園里的活動(dòng)等。另外在寫(xiě)的時(shí)候，我們可以再補(bǔ)充一些公園里的場(chǎng)景和自己的感受等相關(guān)的內(nèi)容。因?yàn)檫@是一篇日記，所以這篇短文應(yīng)主要使用一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)，要注意句子中動(dòng)詞形式的變化。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，要按照時(shí)間的順序記錄這一天的行程，注意表達(dá)流暢，語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的范文。在這篇短文中作者記錄了自己和同學(xué)們?cè)谌嗣窆珗@春游的情景。作者寫(xiě)作時(shí)是按照時(shí)間順序來(lái)安排的，從早上在校門(mén)口集合出發(fā)，到在公園里做的事情等，非常有條理，有秩序。本文時(shí)態(tài)、人稱(chēng)正確，表述流暢，加上了一些自己感受的句子，使文章更豐富。文章中較好的句式有We went there by bike and we arrived at the People’s Park at half past 8、There were lots of people、Then we had a picnic together、We were very happy等。