Question

第三節  書面表達（滿分30分）

       假定你是李華。你們學校和一所美國中學簽署了教師交流協議。在過去的一年里，你們的英文老師是來自這所中學的Sue Wood。不久前她返回美國任教。請你根據寫作要點和要求給Sue寫封電子郵件。

       寫作要點：

       1.對她表達感謝之意;                       

2.介紹她離開后你自己及班里發生的事情;

       3.希望了解她的近況。                     

       要求：

       1.短文須寫在答題卡的指定區域。          

2.短文詞數不少于100（不含已寫好的部分）。

       3.內容充實，結構完整，語意連貫。       

4.書寫須清晰、工整。

       5.郵件中不能體現本人真實信息。

       Dear Sure,

       I’m Li Hua, one of your students in China. _______________________________________

______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

All the best

       Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version：

       Dear Sure,

       I’m Li Hua, one of your students in China. It’s almost a month since you left us. We all miss you and are very grateful for what you did for us.

       We are busy as usual. We had an English speech contest the other day. I won the first prize! This again reminds me of all your kind help. Do you still remember the trees we planted together on the hill behind the school? Yesterday, we went there and watered them. The tree you planted yourself is growing well, and the whole class decided to name it Sue Wood. Will you come back to see Sue Wood?

       How is everything with you lately? We hope to know more about you and your American students. Hope to keep in close touch.

       All the best

       Li Hua

解析:

【思路點撥】試題為應用文中的書信寫作，試題給出了寫作要點，特別是具體的寫作細節，為命題性寫作。寫好此文，需注意三點：一是寫信格式要準確，信的開頭已經給出，但切記要寫好信的結尾。二是要詳略得當，如介紹她離開后你自己班里發生的事情，考生最有話可說，但切忌長篇大論，只需作簡要的介紹即可。三是切忌照譯，要適當地增加細節，恰當地使用連接過渡詞，以使行文連貫。

【范文點評】

文章要點齊全，寫作層次清楚，能緊扣要點適當地增加細節，例如“We all miss you and are very grateful for what you did for us.”，從而使行為連貫。在表達句式上，注意了句式結構的多變，有簡單句，并列句和復合句，有陳述句還有疑問句，還用到了較為復雜的定語從句，如The tree you planted yourself is growing well and the whole class decided to name it Sue Wood；同時還注重了一些優美詞匯的使用，如“remind …of…”，“keep in close touch”等，從而顯示出較強的語言運用能力。