Question

14．在你18歲生日到來之際，你父親準備送你一件禮物，并讓你做出自己的選擇．你會選擇哪份禮物，闡述你選擇這份禮物的理由．
1．iphone 7s    2．A trip to London      3．An experience as a volunteer
An experience as a volunteer
With my 18th birthday drawing near，my father promises me that I can choose a gift for my birthday．（高分句型一）After a thoughtful considersation，I choose an experience as av olunteer as my gift．
I plan to work as a volunteer at a nursing home on my birthday．As a volunteer，I will clean the room for the old people in the morning．What's more，I will read articles for them，which will help them learn whatis going on at home and abroad．（高分句型二）Most of the old peopleare weak，so Iwill take them to take exercise．I am sure The old people there will be satisfied with my work．As far as I am concerned，I can bring joy to other people as a volunteer．It will make me a more caring person．In a word，my work as a volunteer will be extremely rewarding and I will have a meaningful and unforgettable birthday!（高分句型三）．

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分析 本篇書面表達屬于開放類作文，根據(jù)提示信息在你18歲生日到來之際，你父親準備送你一件禮物，并讓你做出自己的選擇．你會選擇哪份禮物，闡述你選擇這份禮物的理由，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，2、要在合理的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：thoughtful considersation深思熟慮；plan to計劃做…；What's more而且；be satisfied with 對…滿意；As far as I am concerned以我的觀點來看；In a word總之
With my 18th birthday drawing near，my father promises me that I can choose a gift for my birthday．（高分句型一）
What's more，I will read articles for them，which will help them learn what is going on at home and abroad．（高分句型二）
In a word，my work as a volunteer will be extremely rewarding and I will have a meaningful and unforgettable birthday!（高分句型三）

解答 An experience as a volunteer
       With my 18th birthday drawing near，my father promises me that I can choose a gift for my birthday．（高分句型一）After a thoughtful considersation，I choose an experience as a volunteer as my gift．
       I plan to work as a volunteer at a nursing home on my birthday．As a volunteer，I will clean the room for the old people in the morning．What's more，I will read articles for them，which will help them learn what is going on at home and abroad．（高分句型二）Most of the old people are weak，so I will take them to take exercise．I am sure The old people there will be satisfied with my work．
      As far as I am concerned，I can bring joy to other people as a volunteer．It will make me a more caring person．In a word，my work as a volunteer will be extremely rewarding and I will have a meaningful and unforgettable birthday!（高分句型三）

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．