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7．現在，很多學生由于缺乏自制力，對電腦游戲上癮，結果造成很多危害．假設你是班長，請你用英語寫一篇短文，發表在你班自辦的英語刊物Showing English上，以便讓同學們認識到電腦游戲的危害，從而戒掉這一不良習慣．短文內容包括：
1．浪費了本該學習的時間，影響學業；
2．對健康造成危害，特別是眼睛；
3．影響和他人的相處；
4．建議采用其他的方式度過休閑時間．
注意：
1．詞數100左右；
2．可適當增加細節，以使行文連貫．
參考詞匯：對…上癮be addicted to．
Some students think that playing computer games is interesting and relaxing．However，in fact，if you're addicted to it，it will be harmful to you in many ways．To begin with，it will make you waste too much valuable time which you should spend on your study or other meaningful things．（高分句型一）
As a result，you will fall behind in your studies．In addition，playing computer games for a long time will do harm to your health，especially to your eyes．（高分句型二）Thirdly，it will affect your relationships with your classmates，friends and family members．So，I hope that you can read more good books，take more exercise or listen to music to spend your spare time instead of playing computer games．（高分句型三）．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據提示信息現在，很多學生由于缺乏自制力，對電腦游戲上癮，結果造成很多危害．假設你是班長，請你用英語寫一篇短文，發表在你班自辦的英語刊物Showing English上，以便讓同學們認識到電腦游戲的危害，從而戒掉這一不良習慣，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：浪費了本該學習的時間，影響學業；對健康造成危害，特別是眼睛；影響和他人的相處；建議采用其他的方式度過休閑時間．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據要表達的內容確定句子的時態、語態．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：However然而；in fact事實上；be addicted to 對…上癮；To begin with首先；As a result結果；In addition另外；instead of而不是；
To begin with，it will make you waste too much valuable time which you should spend on your study or other meaningful things．（高分句型一）
In addition，playing computer games for a long time will do harm to your health，especially to your eyes．（高分句型二）
So，I hope that you can read more good books，take more exercise or listen to music to spend your spare time instead of playing computer games．（高分句型三）

解答 Some students think that playing computer games is interesting and relaxing．However，in fact，if you're addicted to it，it will be harmful to you in many ways．To begin with，it will make you waste too much valuable time which you should spend on your study or other meaningful things．（高分句型一）
       As a result，you will fall behind in your studies．In addition，playing computer games for a long time will do harm to your health，especially to your eyes．（高分句型二）Thirdly，it will affect your relationships with your classmates，friends and family members．So，I hope that you can read more good books，take more exercise or listen to music to spend your spare time instead of playing computer games．（高分句型三）

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．