Question

3．假如你是李明，你的外教老師Tom來信詢問你校和諧校園的創建情況．請你根據以下內容提示，簡要回復此次活動給你校帶來的主要變化：
①園環境的變化；
②同學、師生關系的變化；
③學習氛圍的變化；
④自己的感受；
參考詞匯：harmonious 和諧的       environment 環境      attractive 吸引人的；迷人的．
注意：詞數100左右，信的格式和開頭語已為你寫好，不計入總次數．
Dear Tom，
I'm writing to tell you something about the harmonious school activity，which makes many changes on our campus．
As is known to all，a harmonious school life is important to high school students．（高分句型一）On the one hand，the environment in our school gets better and better．With more and more trees and flowers planted，our school looks more beautiful．（高分句型二）We can have a good rest and put our heart into study．On the other hand，the atmosphere among people is very harmonious．Students get along well with each other．We do respect our teacher and they also do love us．Our school is just like big family．We will have a good mood and enjoy being together．
In my opinion，I think we should try our best to build a harmonious school life．I like studying in such a beautiful school．Let's do what we can from now on to make our school more and more attractive．（高分句型三）
Yours，
Li Ming．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據提示信息假如你是李明，你的外教老師Tom來信詢問你校和諧校園的創建情況．請你根據以下內容提示，簡要回復此次活動給你校帶來的主要變化，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：①園環境的變化；②同學、師生關系的變化；③學習氛圍的變化；④自己的感受；2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據要表達的內容確定句子的時態、語態．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：As is known to all眾所周知；On the one hand一方面；On the other hand另一方面；get along well with 與…相處的好；In my opinion以我的觀點來看；
As is known to all，a harmonious school life is important to high school students．（高分句型一）
With more and more trees and flowers planted，our school looks more beautiful．（高分句型二）
Let's do what we can from now on to make our school more and more attractive．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Tom，
       I'm writing to tell you something about the harmonious school activity，which makes many changes on our campus．
       As is known to all，a harmonious school life is important to high school students．（高分句型一）On the one hand，the environment in our school gets better and better．With more and more trees and flowers planted，our school looks more beautiful．（高分句型二）We can have a good rest and put our heart into study．On the other hand，the atmosphere among people is very harmonious．Students get along well with each other．We do respect our teacher and they also do love us．Our school is just like big family．We will have a good mood and enjoy being together．
        In my opinion，I think we should try our best to build a harmonious school life．I like studying in such a beautiful school．Let's do what we can from now on to make our school more and more attractive．（高分句型三）
                                                         Yours，
                                                        Li Ming

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．