Question

假設(shè)你將作為高三畢業(yè)生代表在畢業(yè)典禮上用英文作一簡(jiǎn)短的告別演講，該演講應(yīng)包含以下要點(diǎn):

1、榮幸有此機(jī)會(huì)演講；

2、對(duì)高中生活的懷念；

3、對(duì)老師的感謝；

4、對(duì)未來(lái)的向往；

5、對(duì)母校的祝福。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)120 左右；

2. 開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好；

3. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié).以使行文連貫；

4. 文中不能出現(xiàn)考生真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

參考詞匯：畢業(yè)典禮graduation ceremony My teachers and fellow students,

Answer 1

In a couple of weeks, we’ll say goodbye to our school. It’s my great honor to stand here to say a few words at this very graduation ceremony.

I will never forget the past three years, a wonderful journey with you, full of laughter and tears.To make the journey safe and fruitful, our great teachers contributed their time, energy, love and the whole heart. Here, we are extremely grateful for all that you, my dear teachers, have done for us.It’ll soon be the time for us to depart, though unwillingly. But it is not the end. It just means that we’re going to begin a new journey and we are very confident of our future.

Finally, on behalf of all the graduates present here, let me express our sincere wishes for our school and respectable teachers. Thank you!

【解析】

試題分析：考官評(píng)卷首先會(huì)根據(jù)文章的內(nèi)容和語(yǔ)言判定作文所屬的檔次，然后從：內(nèi)容切題，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確、多樣、連貫、得體，這幾個(gè)方面評(píng)定分?jǐn)?shù)。注意條理要清晰，邏輯順序和結(jié)構(gòu)要恰當(dāng)，同時(shí)要盡量保持簡(jiǎn)潔精干的內(nèi)容，不拖泥帶水。要注意題中所給的信息，不可偏題，應(yīng)用文寫作對(duì)于文章內(nèi)容的要求是要達(dá)到寫作目的。盡量保持卷面整潔，字體美觀，注意行文的連貫性。時(shí)態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。結(jié)構(gòu)上：可采取總分模式。使用一些高級(jí)句型和詞匯提升作文檔次。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】It’s my great honor to 這是畢業(yè)典禮等正式公開(kāi)場(chǎng)合通常都會(huì)有的恭敬語(yǔ)，往往是為了表現(xiàn)出演講人的謙遜和對(duì)會(huì)議的尊重。其中it is 放在句首是形式主語(yǔ)。I will never forget the past three years, a wonderful journey with you, full of laughter and tears.中 a wonderful journey with you, full of laughter and tears都是前面那個(gè)小句的補(bǔ)語(yǔ)，這樣寫可以免去寫成定語(yǔ)從句那樣的復(fù)雜句，作為大會(huì)發(fā)言來(lái)說(shuō)更清晰和生動(dòng)。To make the journey safe and fruitful第三句將動(dòng)詞不定式的目的狀語(yǔ)提前，符合英美國(guó)家寫作規(guī)律。Here, we are extremely grateful for all that you, my dear teachers, have done for us.。這一句看似簡(jiǎn)單，但實(shí)際上卻是一個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句。從句中 my dear teachers是you的同謂語(yǔ)，That的先行詞為all。整句的意思是，這里，我們尤其感激對(duì)于親愛(ài)的老師你們?yōu)槲覀冏龅氖隆�It just means that we’re going to begin a new journey …這又是一個(gè)賓語(yǔ)從句。高級(jí)短語(yǔ) be confident of 對(duì)…有信心，on behalf of 代表某人的（利益）使得文章等級(jí)提升。該范文體現(xiàn)出了題目中的所有要求，完成了寫作目的。

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