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提示：假如你是Mike，請根據下面所給的Mike的family tree，以My Family為題，寫一篇小短文。要求條理清楚，意思連貫，語句通順，標點正確，書寫清晰規范。要將所給的內容全部體現在短文中：Mr Jim Brown警察40歲，Mrs Brown英語教師37歲，Ann Brown光明中學三年級二班13歲，Mike Brown立達中學一年級四班11歲。

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參考答案： 　　Hello, friends! My name is Mike Brown. Please come and meet my family. My father is Jim Brown. He's 40. He's a policeman. My mother is Lily Brown. She's 37. She's an English teacher. I have a sister. Her name is Ann Brown. She is thirteen. She's in Class Two, Grade Three, Guangming Middle School. I'm eleven. I'm in the same school, but I'm in Class Four, Grade One. Look! This is my family! 　　【解析】這是一篇“提示＋圖表”形式的書面表達題。做題時首先要圍繞提供的信息進行認真的審題，通過審題要明確以下兩點主要要求： 　　1．要以“My Family”為題寫一篇不少于60個單詞的小短文。 　　2．短文一定要以第一人稱的口吻來寫。 　　其次，同過審題明確要求之后，就要列出要點： 　　1) my name, Mike Brown 　　2) my father, Jim Brown, 40, policeman 　　3) my mother, Lily Brown, 37, an English teacher 　　4) have a sister, Ann Brown, 13, Class Two, Grade Three, Guangming Middle School 　　5) I, eleven, in the same school, in Class Four, Grade One 　　3．在列出的要點之間加上適當的詞或詞組，把要點組合初稿。在組合過程中尤其要注意謂語動詞與人稱之間的一致性，同時注意標點符號和大小寫。 　　初稿如下： 　　My name is Mike Brown. My father is Jim Brown. He's 40. He's a policeman. My mother is Lily Brown. She's 37. She's an English teacher. I have a sister. Her name is Ann Brown. She is thirteen. She's in Class Two, Grade Three, Guangming Middle School. I'm eleven. I'm in the same school. I'm in Class Four, Grade One. 　　4．形成初稿后，要根據提示要求進一步復查，檢查是否有要點遺漏，謂語動詞是否運用準確，單詞是否有拼寫錯誤，大小寫、標點符號是否都正確。另外還要檢查詞數是否符合規定的要求，整個短文的意思是否連貫。根據這些要求，通過對上面初稿的復查，覺得短文的詞數還太少，且短文單調。因此，我們可以將短文修改為下面的短文。