Question

4月20日，我國四川雅安發生特大地震，給人們的生命和財產安全帶來重大損失。災后人們紛紛伸出了援助之手。請你以校委會的名義用英語寫一份80字左右的倡議書，開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數。
要點提示：(1)地震帶來重大損失：①摧毀了(destroy)村莊；②人們失去了良田和家園；③數百人失去生命；
(2)人們紛紛獻出愛心，急忙給災區人民提供了食物和衣服；
(3)作為中學生我們應該做什么……
Dear schoolmates,
On April 20, An earthquake hit Yaan Sichuan. It brought a great loss to the people there.
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If everyone gives a hand , our world will become much more beautiful .
School committee

Answer 1

Dear schoolmates,
On April 20, An earthquake hit Yaan Sichuan. It brought a great loss to the people there.
The earthquake brought a great loss. It destroyed the villages and towns, so people lost their farmlands and homes. hundreds of people even lost their homes. They had nowhere to live and no food to eat. When people heard the news, they showed their love in different ways. They were in a great hurry to provide food and clothes to the people in disaster areas. Some even gave money to them. As students, I think we should try our best to help the people in need. Let’s save our pocket money and send it to them.
If everyone gives a hand , our world will become much more beautiful .
School committee

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，所給材料比較詳細，寫作中注意將雅安發生地震的事實及這次活動目的介紹清楚，并發出捐款的倡議。在寫作時要注意時態，人稱和固定詞組的搭配，要注意語言的規范性。結合材料可知本文主要是一般現在及過去時態，注意時間狀語是時態的搭配及主謂一致問題。寫作中適當使用連詞，序數詞，做到上下文聯系緊密，、條理清楚，符合邏輯關系。
點評：做英語書面表達時，要注意認真審題，分析體裁，確定時態；分析內容要點，列出一些基本詞匯及詞組；注意表達的條理性，用好連接詞。最后，注意不要犯語法、句法以及搭配性錯誤。日常學習中，注意多背誦范文，熟記一些經典句型，考試時就能有所參照，有的放矢。