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Last summer holiday, my parents and I went to Beijing. On the first day, we went to the Great Wall. We took many photos there. Although we were very tired, we were very happy. On the second day, we visited the Summer Palace. There were many people there. We saw many flowers and grass there. They were very beautiful. We also learned much about our country. On the third day, we went shopping, hang out and ate some delicious food there. We had a good time. I want to go there again some day.

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們記敘一次去北京的旅行，在題目中給出了我們詳細的信息，是關于在北京的旅行。我們需要用正確的英語將這三天的行程表達出來。因為這里說的是去年夏天的事情，所以整篇短文都需要用一般過去時，因此要注意每句話中的動詞，都要用過去式形式。寫作時按照時間的順序將這次旅行記錄下來就可以了。注意表達的流暢和連貫。
【亮點說明】這是一篇比較優秀的范文。在這篇短文中作者記敘了自己去年暑假和父母一起去北京旅行的事情。全文使用了正確的時態，因為記敘的是過去的事情，所以應該用一般過去時，句子中的動詞應該用過去式的形式，還注意到了一些不規則的變化。文章按照時間的順序將這三天作者在北京參觀的地方和做的事情記敘下來，比較有條理。短文中的較好的句式有Although we were very tired, we were very happy、There were many people there、We also learned much about our country等。