Question

以為My first DIY job 為題，用英語(yǔ)寫一篇短文， 詞數(shù)90個(gè)左右。內(nèi)容必須包括以下要點(diǎn)，也可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，但不要逐條翻譯。
要點(diǎn)：1. 趕在媽媽生日到來(lái)前做了一個(gè)生日音樂(lè)盒，并對(duì)此加以保密以給媽媽一個(gè)驚喜；
2. 花了許多時(shí)間，在制作期間曾出錯(cuò)；
3. 將一朵真玫瑰粘貼在盒蓋上；
4. 打開(kāi)盒子后媽媽就聽(tīng)到生日歌；
5. 第一次親手為媽媽做禮物， 媽媽高興， 你更高興。
My first DIY job
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Answer 1

One possible version:
My first DIY job
Mum’s birthday was coming, so I decided to make her a birthday music box. I kept this secret, because I wanted to give her a surprise. It took me three hours to make it. During the course of making it, many things went wrong. I sticked a real rose to the cover of the box. After Mum opened the box, she heard the birthday song. This was the first time for me to make a present for Mum with my own hands. Mum was very happy, and I was even happier.

試題分析：本文是材料作文，考生在寫作之前必須認(rèn)真讀題，把握寫作要求和寫作目的。本文要求寫My first DIY job，內(nèi)容是給媽媽做生日禮物的過(guò)程。應(yīng)該用第一人稱，時(shí)態(tài)是一般過(guò)去時(shí)。寫作前最好先列出提綱，寫出有關(guān)的短語(yǔ)和固定表達(dá)備用。最后連起來(lái)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】 本文做到了包含所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，語(yǔ)句通順，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)運(yùn)用正確。還恰當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用了些短語(yǔ)和句式，如It took me three hours to make it ; go wrong等等。并注意了句子開(kāi)頭的變化和的銜接如：so，because and等等。