Question

請(qǐng)以how I change為題，寫一篇80詞左右的短文，描述你讀初中兩年來的變化。寫作要點(diǎn)包括外貌，興趣愛好，行為習(xí)慣等方面。

注意：1. 短文開頭已寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

2. 短文必須包括所有要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使短文連貫、通順。

 

Answer 1

My life has changed a lot in the past two years. I was fat and short when I came to the middle school. At that time I was interested in computer games and I spent most of time on it. I often stayed up and got up late. My parents were worried about me.

With the teachers’ help, I like sports now and I often play football with my classmates after school. So I become taller and stronger than before. I have a few close friends and we all like reading, too. So I usually go to the library to read some interesting books together with them. I go to bed and get up early now. My parents feel glad to see these. I’m sure I’ll be better and better.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇短文要求我們以how I change為題寫一篇作文，即我是怎樣變化的。在題目中給了我們這篇短文的主要內(nèi)容。一是外貌方面的改變。二是興趣愛好方面的改變。最后是行為習(xí)慣等方面的變化等。主要內(nèi)容雖然已經(jīng)列好，但是還需要我們自己去充實(shí)，讓它變得完整、合理，內(nèi)容豐富，這就需要花費(fèi)我們的想象力，以及我們平時(shí)積累的知識(shí)。另外，寫作時(shí)，還需注意語句間的銜接，使文意連貫，表達(dá)流暢。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】這是一篇比較不錯(cuò)的作文。作者從外貌，興趣愛好，行為習(xí)慣等三個(gè)方面，講述了自己這兩年來的變化，層次非常的清晰。短文中需要作者自己補(bǔ)充的內(nèi)容完成得也不錯(cuò)。如My parents were worried about me.等。這些內(nèi)容都比較貼合文章的需要，意思也很連貫。文章中還用了一些比較好的句型，如With the teachers’ help, I like sports now and I often play football with my classmates after school.等。

考點(diǎn)：提綱類作文。