Question

書(shū)面表達(dá)（15分）
請(qǐng)以“My Ideal School”為題，根據(jù)以下的內(nèi)容提示，寫(xiě)一篇80詞左右的短文。
提示：1、每天八點(diǎn)半開(kāi)始上課，下午三點(diǎn)半放學(xué)，有足夠的時(shí)間進(jìn)行課外活動(dòng)。
2、有更少的老師和學(xué)生，他們都很友善。
3、有一個(gè)大的餐廳，里面有許多花，午餐時(shí)在里面愉快的互相聊天。
4、每周都有電腦課和音樂(lè)課，有很多的興趣小組和課外活動(dòng)。
5、每天只有半小時(shí)的家庭作業(yè)，每周可以休息三天。

Answer 1

My ideal school
My ideal school day will start at 9:30 a.m. because I like sleeping. The school day finishes at 3:30 p.m. We will have more free time to do other things.We have an hour for lunch. There is a big and beautiful dining hall. We can eat tasty meals, chat and have a rest in it. We can listen to pop music while we have lunch. It's wonderful.We have seven subjects. They are Computer Studies, English, Geography, History, Home Economics, Swimming and Tennis. So we have a swimming pool and a tennis court. We also have many clubs, such as Cooking Lessons, Drama Club, Driving Lessons, Film Club, Reading Club, Singing Group.We wear school uniforms. Girls wear skirts, white blouses, ties and coats. Boys wear black trousers, white shirts, ties and coats.There is a beautiful park and some shops near the school. In the school, there is a big library with lots of books.We don't have homework every day. But we will do some exercises in class. Every month, we go on a school trip. It's interesting.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，本文已經(jīng)給出了主要寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，然后圍繞要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。寫(xiě)作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上；結(jié)合材料內(nèi)容，可知本文主要是第一人稱，一般現(xiàn)在及將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)，注意主謂一致及時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)與時(shí)態(tài)的一致問(wèn)題。語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文使用的句式較為簡(jiǎn)單.如: s My ideal school day will start……我理想的學(xué)校會(huì)在……開(kāi)始；We have an hour for lunch我們有一個(gè)小時(shí)的時(shí)間吃飯等,但是通過(guò)一些連詞，如：so but等的連接，構(gòu)成了一篇布局合理，邏輯清楚的文章，把自己想象中的學(xué)校介紹的明明白白，不失為一篇上等作文。