Question

某中學在開展“崇尚節儉，文明做人(advocating thrift and being civilized)”活動一年來，取得了很好的效果，但還有極少數學生做得不夠好，在校園里依然還會出現以下圖片中的情形。請你選擇以下現象中的幾種或全部進行描述，并就中學生如何“杜絕浪費，文明做人”提出至少兩點建議。
                    
leave the tap on    leave the lights on    throw the food away    draw on the wall  drop rubbish everywhere
要求：1. 文中不得出現真實的人名、校名。
2. 語言通順，意思連貫，書寫規范。
3. 詞數80～100。文章的開頭已給出，不計入總詞數。
Some middle school students aren’t doing enough in “advocating thrift and being civilized”.
 
 
 
 

Answer 1

Some middle school students aren’t doing enough in “advocating thrift and being civilized.”
We’re sorry to see that there is still some waste in our school! For example, some often leave the taps on after washing their hands. In the dinning hall, a lot of food can be seen left after the meals. What’s worse, we often find that waste paper is thrown everywhere, which makes others feel uncomfortable. In addition, some students like to write or draw on the wall or on the desk.
As middle school students, we should develop good habits and stop wasting anything. Let’s do it from now on!

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們對學生們的一些浪費行為進行描述，并提出合理建議。題目中已經給了我們開頭Some middle school students aren’t doing enough in “advocating thrift and being civilized.”，清楚地點明了在學生中間仍然存在著浪費的行為。因此接下來我們就可以接著這個話題，對學生們的浪費行為進行描述。我們可以從題目中給出的幾幅圖片中選擇幾種，詳細地描寫學生們做得不好的地方。然后我們要對這些現象提出建議，這就需要我們自己發揮想象力，把這一部分的內容補充完整。寫作時，我們要仔細觀察圖片，將這些圖片中的內容表達準確，使用正確的時態和人稱。另外還需注意語句間的連接，以使短文表達流暢、連貫。
【亮點說明】這是一篇優秀的作文。在這篇短文中，作者對學生們中間還存在的浪費、不文明的現象進行了描述，并在文章的最后給出了自己的建議。符合題目要求，內容完整，結構清楚。作者對題目中給出的四幅圖片進行了描述，如We’re sorry to see that there is still some waste in our school!、In the dinning hall, a lot of food can be seen left after the meals、What’s worse, we often find that waste paper is thrown everywhere、In addition, some students like to write or draw on the wall or on the desk。這部分中作者使用了比較多的句型和短語，如What’s worse、We’re sorry to see…、in addition等。最后作者給出了自己的建議，這里作者使用的短語是develop good habits,這個短語中的develop非常好；還有句型stop doing sth.，停止做某事。